Nathan Boole

This is a submission for Flash Comp 300 

Nathan broke all the rules on this one, going over the word count but getting on the short list by showing great ambition. A love triangle played out over the course of a year. Pay close attention to the dates and times:

 

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
11/3/2007 10:15 AM
What’s the deal?

Why don’t you just tell me what you want?

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
11/3/2007 1:37 PM
Re: What’s the deal?
Fine. U asked. I want 2 know who that woman was you were with

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
11/3/2007 4:21 PM
Re: What’s the deal?
That was the new secretary, Margerie. I work with her.

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
11/3/2007 5:01 PM
Re: What’s the deal?
Oh i see, you were “working late.”

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
11/7/2007 5:23 PM
So…
When am I going to see you again?

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
11/4/2007 8:04 AM
Re: What’s the deal?
Yes, actually. Can’t this wait til I get back?

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
Re: So…
I can get away on the 10th for a while. She’s starting to get suspicious though. Have to be more careful.

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
11/4/2007 10:44 AM
Re: What’s the deal?
You won’t have time to talk when you get back either. I know you.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
11/4/2007 12:00 PM
Re: What’s the deal?
Look, I WILL have time when I get back, okay? Just wait til then.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/12/2008 3:34 PM
Big news.
I’m pregnant.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
5/15/2008 10:57 AM
Re: You playin on me?
Not this again. why do you always do this when I’m out of town?

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/12/2008 6:40 PM
James?
Hello?

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/15/2008 11:20 AM
Re: You playin on me?
that wouldnt happen if you didnt go on so many trips.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
5/12/2008 8:20 PM
Re: James?
Tell me you’re kidding.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
5/15/2008 4:15 PM
Re: You playin on me?
It’s not like I have a choice, Beth. I have to do this.

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/15/2008 4:45 PM
Re: You playin on me?
You dont HAVE to. You coulda taken the other position.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/12/2008 9:00 PM
Re: James?
No I’m not! I’m having your baby!

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
5/12/2008 9:30 PM
Re: James?
Oh my god. I can’t deal with this right now.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
10/20/2008 12:43 PM
Beth: Bet you can’t
guess who’s having your husband’s baby?

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
5/15/2008 6:23 PM
Re: You playin on me?
It wasn’t as good, you know that.

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
10/20/2008 1:16 PM
Re: Beth: Bet you can’t
Who the fuck is this?

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
5/13/2008 1:20 PM
Let’s talk.
You’re going to have the baby?

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
10/20/2008 2:30 PM
Re: Beth: Bet you can’t
Your husband’s lover, bitch.

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/16/2008 8:14 AM
Re: You playin on me?
I dont think I can do this any more.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/13/2008 2:03 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
Yes. I am.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
5/13/2008 2:50 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
Are you sure that’s a good idea?

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
10/20/2008 2:43 PM
Re: Beth: Bet you can’t
Fuck you your not pregnant. your just the secretary bitch. quit fucking with me.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/13/2008 3:30 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
Yes. I am.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
5/16/2008 10:02 AM
Re: You playin on me?
I’m sick of your shit, Beth. I’ll be home in two days, just deal with it.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
5/13/2008 4:11 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
Okay. Okay. Let me think about how to deal with this.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
10/20/2008 3:03 PM
Re: Beth: Bet you can’t
Oh I’m fucking with SOMEONE alright, but it’s not you. Ask your husband.

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
10/20/2008 3:10 PM
You cheating bastard. I want a divorce.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/13/2008 5:00 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
Okay. Don’t think too long.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
10/20/2008 5:22 PM
Re:
Good, so do I. I’ve had enough of this bullshit.

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
10/20/2008 3:15 PM
Re: Beth: Bet you can’t
Fuck u cunt.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
5/13/2008 6:10 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
So what are we going to do?

AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
10/20/2008 6:00 PM
Re:
Me 2 you dickhead.

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to AqueousHumor@guilemail.com
10/20/2008 6:15 PM
Re:
See you in court.

Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
to JamesKing87@guilemail.com
5/13/2008 6:35 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
You’re asking me?!

JamesKing87@guilemail.com
to Margerie_Tanner@comsync.com
5/13/2008 7:09 PM
Re: Let’s talk.
Just tell me what you want.

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Nathan is a writer, massage therapist, and a janitor. He writes primarily sci-fi and fantasy, with a liberal sprinkling of whatever catches his imagination. He lives in Atlanta, GA with his brother, his brother’s cat, and about 9,000,000 books. He has a short story, a steam punk work called Black Bradley, available for sale through Amazon  http://amzn.to/TWMau7

 

9 thoughts on “Nathan Boole

  1. At first I really had to focus on the who and when, but I quickly found myself following the plot with no confusion.
    Truly a work of art.

  2. Very well done, Nathan. You captured the voice of the three actors in this story pretty well, even to the typos and punctuation pattern.

    Would love to see the next chapter with a lawyer involved. 🙂

    Scott

  3. One of the great challenges in writing is to use the medium to tell the story. Each medium lends itself to other stories. And this is an example of the medium being used very well. The messages being out of sync forces me to pay attention to the times, not to simply gloss over them. I am forced to construct the timeline in my head. Meanwhile the presented order flows emotionally, making this less about a husband cheating on his wife, and more about three people drifting apart and together. I’m not usually a fan of flash fiction, but this is well presented and clever.

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